Fighter - Writing Narrative

 Hey readers,

Today I have been finishing a narrative story that I have made on my own. First I had to make a plan before making the story. Then after that, we write the story. It will be about a man fighting a criminal. My favorite sentence is " The wind felt like it was brushing his hair" One thing I can improve on is adding more describing word.

We also had to include, similes, onomatopoeia, adjectives, language features and metaphor, setting and a problem! I also try not to use the words happy, said, big and went. Now here is my story! 

Fighter

As a man scurried, he could see buildings in between the trees.

His name was Cory, an undercover spy.

He was searching for a guy named Venus Wonders. “Swish.”

The wind felt like it was brushing his hair.

He jogged out of the forest. He gasped at a stunning city.

It had different types of lights and beautiful flowers.   

He ran into a cafe that was made out of planks. All the windows were shaped differently.

Cory started moving, until some random guy pushed his shoulder.

They were running from something. Cory ignored ordering something and followed him.

The guy stopped and was still. Cory’s sweat was dripping down his face.

“We need him here. If you don’t, you're gonna get eliminated.” A lady chuckled.

The lady kept laughing and started walking away. Cory snatched the guy's leg.

He tried to escape out of Cory’s grip.

Suddenly Cory’s katana slipped out of his hands. 

“What do you want from me!?” He knocked his hand off. He slipped and grabbed his katana. 

“SCHING!” His hoodie fell off his head. “So you are Venus Wonders? ”

He grabbed out his two guns. Cory started giggling. 

They started shouting and going rough on each other.

After that, they all got tired and started puffing. Cory pulled out his phone, calling for backup.

“Hey, I need backup,” Cory whispered. His blood started dripping on his shirt.

“Fight me! I'm fearless! ”

Cory stayed calm and took a deep breath. 

His eyes caught sight of one of his guns laying on the ground.

He reloaded the bullet and shot Venus’s left leg.

“BANG! ”

The shot woke everyone up, they were very shocked. Venus fell and struggled to move.

“You stay right there.” We waited for the cop to come.

The police’s siren was very loud, almost like it was on a speaker. 

The police chained his hands as tight as possible.

The cops searched around the area and luckily found some children that were unconscious.

Venus was a criminal, kidnapping kids at night.  “I'll get you next time Cory,” Venus growled. 

He got pulled in the car and drifted away. Everyone started calming down

and fled back to their own apartment.

“He never listens eh,” the lady chuckled.

A few days later, everything was going well. Meanwhile in jail, Venus regretted what he had done to the children. Everything in life started to go back to normal. The end.

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